tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post1197180722053457613..comments2024-03-14T00:49:40.263-04:00Comments on As Vinny C's It: Like You're Supposed To.Vinny Chttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11807312191102871918noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-39445313886012988952012-10-09T18:09:04.484-04:002012-10-09T18:09:04.484-04:00Good writing. Unpretentious. It's a good piece...Good writing. Unpretentious. It's a good piece.Antares Cryptoshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12197876328401157462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-11700552307137658482012-10-09T05:05:19.981-04:002012-10-09T05:05:19.981-04:00You really captured the thought process of the guy...You really captured the thought process of the guy about to take that step. Great read. Flowed well.Brett Minorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13181569922751252054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-19727696576954917322012-10-08T01:15:16.267-04:002012-10-08T01:15:16.267-04:00I think he should wait and go to Europe :-)I think he should wait and go to Europe :-)gina valleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05057006078790933058noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-53854895767077912532012-10-07T17:51:21.959-04:002012-10-07T17:51:21.959-04:00Great start and a relatable piece. The best storie...Great start and a relatable piece. The best stories are ones where people haven't been in that situation but can still see and feel through the story. I've never been a dude or been married but I felt like I was there with them in that apartment. Well done.AccordingtoJewelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14677233524380245752noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-26933633431791399162012-10-07T09:47:35.410-04:002012-10-07T09:47:35.410-04:00What I liked is how I could follow you with the mo...What I liked is how I could follow you with the movie in my head. Your story flowed well and I could totally see everything along the way. You can tell a story. All you need now is practice to fine tune minor details of writing... Awesome job Vin! Marie Nicolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02349867233197745366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-78310653911149139692012-10-07T09:26:14.418-04:002012-10-07T09:26:14.418-04:00I agree with Jes.
There's an easy feel to thi...I agree with Jes.<br /><br />There's an easy feel to this that draws me in, thus, very good writing.Lancehttp://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-67661614038293739182012-10-07T08:33:03.332-04:002012-10-07T08:33:03.332-04:00I loved the shift in tone as the piece progressed,...I loved the shift in tone as the piece progressed, and the section where we are in his head was just perfect. I'd suggest a little less 'tell'in the first part. You don't have to tell us, for instance, that he's uncomfortable in the tux. You're already showing it perfectly in the dialogue and action.Jester Queenhttp://jesterqueen.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-14418536231671920172012-10-07T07:20:01.657-04:002012-10-07T07:20:01.657-04:00Nice first step. You kept the characters simple, d...Nice first step. You kept the characters simple, direct and touchable (not huggable of course). Enjoyed it. ~ JackLonesome Jackalopehttp://www.thelonesomejackalope.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6456755389981750866.post-4333754154198112382012-10-07T00:16:28.979-04:002012-10-07T00:16:28.979-04:00This was a great read. You did an excellent job cr...This was a great read. You did an excellent job creating characters<br />I really cared about . I want to read more.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.com